Does television bring more harm than good?
Today, almost every single family on our planet has a so called “member” which is a television. It is not just an ordinary member, but a very important one, because the time spent next to it exceeds the amount of time spent together with any other family member. Indeed, as according to the American Time Use Survey (2003), it is discovered that watching television is the highest average hours spent by both men and women compared to socializing and communicating activity. Psychologist and parents are perturbed as children can watch television with ease (Sharif 1999). Unquestionably, I strongly assert that television bring more harm than good as television will cause viewers to become physically and mentally deterrent as well as poor behaviour.
Firstly, television viewers defected physically as health problem is one of the cruxes of this issue. “It is a sedentary activity and when indulged in with snacks, can cause obesity and related diseases” (Rutherford 2002, p.14). Additionally, Children too are influenced to not being active if they watch television for prolonged periods (Sharif 1999). Based on a research from UK Time Use Survey (2000), the dearth time spent on doing sports and exercises are quite limited compared with the hours spent on watching television. Briefly, television viewing may lead to health problems.
Secondly, television viewing may also cause audiences especially children to be mentally affected as to their thinking skills. Indeed, it is well-supported by Leigh (2001), as she said that the essential skills in developing problem-solving and organizational activity are majorly affected as children do not generate the imaginative skills to create fictitious characters, situations, and make-believe worlds. Moreover, short-term attention is likely to be implemented into the children’s minds (Sharif 1999). This is because of today’s short segments and loud yet colourful presentation of children’s programs and music video clips. Therefore, children’s thinking ability is reduced as an implication of television viewing.
Lastly, poor behaviour of children is also another consequence of television viewing. Children’s behaviour is often portrayed by the programs they watch. Children nowadays continually become less susceptible to violence as graphic scenes of rampage demonstrated not only on television shows but also on the prime time televised news. As a consequence, children may bear in mind that being violent is normal and it is the only way to solving problems naturally. Furthermore, some poor attitude is illustrated by emulating characters they saw on television (Sharif 1999). In short, bad attitude is likely to happen due to television viewing.
In conclusion, television viewing causes spectators to be disease-prone, children will dearth in thinking skills as well as bad behaviour. Indubitably, television programs are created to demand incessant focus, thus, making us unable to concentrate on things like homework (Leigh 2001). Nevertheless, television becomes a valuable asset when watched in moderation (Rutherford 2002). Finally, related authorities such as parents, and the media should take action from the grass roots level to prevent children from being deteriorated by the bad side of television. Therefore, I stress on my stand once again that television bring more cons than pros.
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Clear introductory sentence. Unique but weird.^^ Thesis statement is clear and good. Every paragraph is quite well supported. The conclusion summarizes all the point. Personally, disease-prone is too much. I think the word is not that suitable. The sentence:” nevertheless,.. valuable asset..2002). makes your essay less convincing. Consider removing it.
Citing is enough and appropriate. Minor mistake in the second para- Children. C should be in small letter.
I think it is well structured and synthesis. A very good flow. All main ideas included. Could be more convincing if that sentence is removed.^^
I think first para should be “IN” our planet…which IS TELEVISION (without ‘a’).while for the second sentence of 1st para, may b you can reconsider because I think that is only your own opinion right? 3rd sentence: ACCORDING …( no need ‘as’)Good introduction with statistics and thesis statement!!
2nd para: 3rd sentence…CHILDREN should be in small letter
Last two para: last 3 sentence, the only way to SOLVE….
Last para: 1st sentence, “dearth” is a noun, you had used it as verb…second sentence, I think the comma after “THUS” is not necessary…3rd sentence, when BEING WATCHED in moderation…
Overall, you have improved! All the points are elaborated well and very clear.Conclusion is also very clear and you had restated the thesis statement…it is a good essay!
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