What are the potential effects of global warming in terms of climate change and how can they be arrested?
Global warming has been a big issue among the scientist up to the extent that it is said that global warming is caused by both human and he environment. Professor Bob Carter of James Cook University, Queensland in his interview in Nzone Tonight said that every scientist does believe that humans have an effect on climate change. However, he also mentions that some places are warming and some places are cooling. Over the last century, our planet Earth has been increasing its temperature without bound. The average surface temperature of the Earth rose 0.6 to 0.9 degrees Celsius (1.08°F to 1.62°F) between 1906 and 2006, and the rate of temperature increase nearly doubled in the last 50 years.(Holli Riebeek, 2007) This is one of the evidence showing global warming is occurring at a rising rate.
As we slowly let global warming becomes uncontrolled, some studies show the potential occurrences to our beloved Earth. One inevitable consequence of global warming is sea-level rise. The problem is serious because as much as 10 percent of the world’s population lives in coastal areas less than 10 meters (about 30 feet) above sea level. (Holli Riebeek, 2007) If this is probably to happen, as sea levels rise, these communities will become increasingly vulnerable to storm damage and flooding. Among the most vulnerable countries is Bangladesh, which has low elevation, a high population density, and is one of the world’s poorest nations. And it will be a hard blow to them as they do not have resources to fend off changes in climate. Water expands as it warms so, as the oceans are heated, the water they contain takes up more volume, and this makes the level of the seas rise. The seas also rise when glaciers and ice sheets melt, feeding more water into the oceans. (Chris Woodford, 2006) According to Al Gore in “An Inconvenient Truth”, he said that the maps of the world also would have to be redrawn as a result of the sea level rise.
Global warming paradoxically causes not only more flooding but also more droughts. (Al Gore, 2007) One of the reasons is that global warming not only increases precipitation worldwide but it also relocates the precipitation. This is to show that the Earth’s temperature is predicted to rise even higher in the future. Global warming will result in more hot days and fewer cool days, with the greatest warming happening over land. Longer, more intense heat waves will become more frequent. (Holli Riebeek, 2007) The warming will enhance coastal erosion, extend the growing season, and melt the ice caps and glaciers. As for now, even mosquitoes are able to climb higher altitudes, not only mosquitoes, but even vectors of infectious diseases spreading. And there has been appearance of new diseases in the last quarter century like SARS, who knows there could be more in the near future. Consequently, species those are not able to adapt the sudden climate change are likely to face extinction. The ultimate consequence of this is hurricanes will likely increase in intensity due to warmer ocean surface temperatures.
As Al Gore said that we are the cause of global warming, we can also contribute to help in reducing the factors of global warming. To reduce the impact of climate change, we need to reduce global warming. (Chris Woodford, 2006) In another meaning, it can be done by producing fewer carbon dioxide emissions and it might mean using less energy or using it more efficiently. To reduce carbon dioxide emission, we should use electric-efficiency appliances by replacing incandescent lamps in our homes with energy-saving fluorescent lamps. We should also consider in buying a hybrid car or a higher mileage cars to help in reducing carbon emission. Use bicycle or walk when you can, rather than driving your car. Other than that, we should plant more trees, recycle useable items. Lastly, we should also join international efforts to stop global warming.
On and all, global warming is causing havoc to human and the environment. We can consider the “climate change skeptics” that they say it is an environmental phenomenon. Nonetheless, we also play a big role in handling this contentious issue. We are to be blamed for our mistakes when the whole world is facing the consequence in the future that is if we do not take immediate actions from now. Prevent is better than cure. Therefore, we have to thrive in the responsibility to make the Earth a better place to live for the sake of our children that will too, live in this world.
3 comments:
1)&2) an interesting introduction since you try to use different citation but I think you have left out the definition of global warming. And also at the end of the para, you forgot to do your thesis statement- state what you should discuss in the following para.If possible, you can actually remove some fact or citation because i thk it is too heavy.Anyway, it is just my suggestion, you can choose to whether follow or not.
3)&4)&5)your paragraphs have sufficient supporting details which i thk it was too much. For example, you explain too much on why the sea level will rise but you do not provide enough examples on the effects of increase in sea level. It makes the paragraph seems like explaining the causes rather than talking about the effects. However, your paragraph which is about the ways to arrest the problem is handled quite well.
6) you haven summarized all the points that you had stated in body paragraph. You have to restate the effects of global warming in the last paragraph...Other parts will be ok...
7) well done for your citation...
8)mistakes:(those in bracket is the correct and suggested answer)
a) first sentence of 1st para: he(the) environment
b)second last sentence of 1st para:
temperature increase(s)
c)first sentence of 2nd para:
show the(its) potential occurrences
d)second sentence of 2nd para:
One(an) inevitable consequence
e) the fifth sentence of 2nd para should be cut off:
(Among the most vulnerable countries is Bangladesh, which has low elevation, a high population density, and is one of the world’s poorest nations. )
f)Then substitute the "Them" in the sixth sentence in 2nd para as:
them(the vulnerable countries)
g)1st sentence of last para:
"On and all "? I dunno whether it is correct or not...
h)last three sentence in last para:
consequence(s) in the future that is( cut off that is)
i) " Prevention" but not " prevent"
All these mistakes are just my suggestion, you can disagree too.
9) overall, it cover all the materials available from the given sources except for the mistakes mentioned above...
Hope it helps...
1. Is there a clear introductory sentence that introduces the subject matter and the controlling idea? What do you suggest for improvement if the introductory sentence is not clear?
Good and clear introductory statement. But should it be he environment or his environment.
2. Is there a thesis statement given as the last sentence of the introductory paragraph? Is it clear and connected to all the topic sentences of the body paragraphs?
You should state the major topic of the essay clearly at the end of the first paragraph. It is not mentioned in your introductory statement.
3. Do the paragraphs have sufficient supporting details and examples? How can the organization be improved?
Yes. Quite packed with illustrative examples.
4. Are there any paragraphs which are not supported well?
No. All are well supported.
5. Are there any sentences or sections that are not clear? If so, how can they be improved?
No. All are quite clear. Only some mistakes ( I hope I didn’t get it wrong) which I will mention later in question 8.
6. Does the conclusion summarize all the main points given in the essay or restate the thesis statement? Is it clear? If not, how can the writer improve this part?
Yes. It summarize all points in brief way and it is clear.
7. Does the writer cite the sources adequately and appropriately? Note any incorrect citation.
I think so.
8. Are there any apparent grammatical or spelling mistakes?
First para- second sentence- scientist or scientistS
- Last sentence- rate of temperature increaseS
Second para- as sea levels rise or as sea level rises.. I think the correct one should be the second one
Third para – second sentence- global warming DOES not only
-the sentence with SARS- i think you should nt begin it with AND. It a little bit informal ( my suggestion)
Forth para- instead of – Use bicycle or walk when YOU can, rather than driving YOUR car.
Since you are using WE all the way, it is a little bit weird. My suggestion: Use bicycle or walk whenever possible, rather than driving A car.
Last para- havoc or havocs?
SKeptics should change to sceptics.
PreventION is better than cure?
9. Does the writer comprehensively cover appropriate materials available from the standard sources? If no, what is missing?
Yes. Almost all materials given are used. This is good.
10. Additional comments:
No additional comments.
lol......scary comments.....haha....thank you very much,...i'll try my best to fix all the circumstances found...in the 1st draft...
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